Pants of Blood in Logline .it ~ allal cinemagoer

A married couple is constrained to have sex for the first time in its wedding night

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Posted by allal on Jun 14, 2014 in Public | 8 comments

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6-14-14
AHStitt says: (Edit)
Sorry mate, but in English this is seriously wrong, Putting aside that it is not regular English, It gives me no idea who is the protagonist and it gives me no idea of what the problem and goal are. It ends up sounding like only one sex scene in the whole story. And I guess that is not what you want it to mean.
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6-14-14
AHStitt says: (Edit)
Sorry. Meant to add that, in English, your suggested title does not work for me. It is miles from what your logline describes.
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6-15-14
Richiev says: (Edit)
Who is constraining them? A wizard? The law?
What is constraining them? Is she forced to wear a chastity belt? Is it a magic spell?
Why? For what purpose?
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“Upon meeting the man of her dreams, a sheltered woman is informed by her domineering grandmother, if she’s to inherit the family fortune she must remain a virgin until her wedding night.”
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6-16-14
Richiev says: (Edit)
btw, on a side note. You can’t constrain someone ‘to’ do something, they are constrained ‘from’ doing something.
In other words you wouldn’t say they’re constrained ‘to’ have sex; you would say they’re constrained ‘from’ having sex until…
Hope that helps, good luck with this!
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6-19-14
Michael Hunter says: (Edit)
You’ve been quiet since you posted this allal, but I gathered you were writing about a couple who couldn’t have sex until their wedding night? It’s a common fact among many religions and cultures around the world, so I would maybe take it to the extreme (to stand out from the crowd). What if it was an arranged marriage, and they’d never met prior to their wedding day?
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  6-19-14
  allal says: (Edit)
  In my country,Morocco, the bride has to prove that she is virgin it is an honor not only for her but for her family . SO, the mother of the groom is happy to hear that her son’s future wife is still a virgin ; women would follow the couple til the door to get the pants of blood .SO, they will stand by the door waiting or doing sth unusual to get the pants;,very often the couple is constrained from doing sex because of the presence of other people next door . SO , do you see now here the constraint coming from ,?
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6-19-14
Michael Hunter says: (Edit)
For full disclosure, it sounds like you’ve already written the screenplay for it:
http://allal-cinemagoer.blogspot.com.au/2013/09/trousers-of-blood-by-allal-el-alaoui.html
I like the idea, and I’m always fascinated by other cultural traditions, but I don’t know about the appeal to the Western market. It would probably be a confronting scene to people not accustomed with it, so I would definitely build up the character/relationships as much as you can. I also imagine it as a foreign subtitled film, rather than written in English.
If the film was only to be released in Morocco, chances are this is a commonplace practice, right? You’d need to make this particular couple stand out.
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  6-19-14
  allal says: (Edit)
  ideed i have written the screenplay for it . what is more, i have shot almost all scenes and it is a 13 minutes shortfilm .I can send you the link if you want to wtch it .
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